After reading this, I hope you realize how much you mean to me. When I feel sad or lonely, I go to you and you give me all the support I need. That's why I brought you with me to this camp. Too bad you and I can see each other only for two hours a day. Well, you didn't pay money to get in here so I think you should be satisfied about staying in the room on the eleventh floor with other people who look like you.
To be honest, you are the type of person who is more beautiful on the inside than the outside. I mean you
are gorgeous, but there's so much more to you than just that. All the adjectives in the world fit you. And I mean everything. Walking dictionary, smart, perverted, etc. I'm really in love with you, and I really want to apologize to you for not being able to spend a lot of time with you these days. Well, at least you have your friend charger. You guys are probably spending more time together than I am with you. By the way, your like my third best friend, so don't be upset when I move on and make friends with other people who look like you. And don't be worried about your boyfriend. He's a Professional and you're just a Mac so I'm sure he's doing fine without you.
Love, your best friend, Juwon
Hi. This is your new writing TA Sohyeon. Are you sure you mean perverted? Look the word up in the dictionary.
ReplyDeleteIt's charming how you described the other laptops as 'other people' and the charger as a 'friend'. In that way, I suppose, your writing fulfills the requirements of a poem. Perhaps you should try to put more poetry into the prose. I like how you say "you are the type of person who is more beautiful on the inside than the outside." I could totally agree with that. Your way of expression is original and intriguing.
You seem to be much at ease with the English language. I hope to see more of your work. Great job!
Pretty good writing. Try and enrich your work with pictures etc., and as Sohyeon says about - you are a good writer! But you don't seem to challenge yourself to fulfill the poetic nature of the assignment. Alliteration and repetition. I think you can go further with this.
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